good lead: I walked my dog every day in the forest and we heard the leaves crunching under our feet every step. One strange day I saw eyes in the dark part of the woods and I wanted to know who they belonged to so I came closer and closer.
bad lead:I walk my dog and I saw eyes in the woods where I was walking.by Paige
good lead: i was in the woods walking i had to take a breath i sat down by a tree a hand popped up from the ground it grabbed my arm i screamed i had to find some help i thout it was the end.
"ha ha!"ilaughed at Caitlin. we were walking on a path that we weren't aloud to go on because it was forbidden(but i was at a friend's house so i was ok). we were yelling at the top of our voices when suddenly with out warning a shuffling noise came from the bushes. "Aaauggghh!"we screamed. "I want to investigate it it might be interesting."said Kylie . "me too!"said caitlin."I'm staying here"i said. Nobody knew what happened to them after that(i never saw them in school either).
bad lead- i went on a path. i screamed. i jumped. i got scared.
I have been having these same dreams for weeks now. I'm walking down a dirt path in the woods. It's fall, the leaves are golden. I feel like someone's behind of me. I look up the path for help and I see my parents. "Wait!" I yell. But my mouth won't work. There is no sound. Finally they point my direction- no behind me. They're frightened and pointing at something behind me.
I was walking down a haunted trail it was so scaru thatehe fainted aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. bad lead:
the yankkes baseball team was walking throught the forest when the boston redsox appeared and then they started fighting over the world seris trophey and eventully boston won (like they did in 2007)
bad laed Kate disappaerd good laed Me and Kate where walking in the woods one day . Then out of nowhere there was movement in the bushes Kate disappered so suddenly I didn't have any time to say a word .
katelynn; good laed; today i went to go take a fall walk and i saw a fox, wolf and a whole iot of ather things the wolf scratched me and I fell to the ground.
zakary goodlead I was walking in the woods I herd somthing and then I herd it agan somthing touch my shouder in pain a goblin I fell to the ground dead.
I was running in the woods when I saw something in the woods. by Ashley
ReplyDeletegood lead: I walked my dog every day in the forest and we heard the leaves crunching under our feet every step. One strange day I saw eyes in the dark part of the woods and I wanted to know who they belonged to so I came closer and closer.
ReplyDeletebad lead:I walk my dog and I saw eyes in the woods where I was walking.by Paige
Emma
ReplyDeletethe fall air was cool the leaves were
changing colors we herd a noes someone or something was fallowing us
bad lead: I was in the woods i saw something.
ReplyDeletegood lead: i was in the woods walking i had to take a breath i sat down by a tree a hand popped up from the ground it grabbed my arm i screamed i had to find some help i thout it was the end.
by brittny
I was walking in the woods
ReplyDeleteand I herd something moving in
the bushes swish SWISH SWISH it was
getting louder and LOUDER.
One day i was walking in the woods
and i herd something
LF
Kate R.
ReplyDeletegood lead:
I love fall! I like to make a big
leaf pile and then jump in. I also
like the cool brease. The leafs are
so pretty. I love fall!
bad lead:
I like fall. I love the leafs. I like fall.
Jacob
ReplyDeletegood lead
i was walking through the the forest and enjoying the scenary
when jackie chan and chuck norris
appeared out of nowhere!I screamed and ran! :{
bad lead:
I ran and screamed
Max A.
ReplyDeletegood lead:
As I walked through a strange forest I herd a scream and felt something on my shoulder.
bad lead:
I walked through a forest.
Kate H-
ReplyDeletegood lead-
"ha ha!"ilaughed at Caitlin. we were walking on a path that we weren't aloud to go on because it was forbidden(but i was at a friend's house so i was ok). we were yelling at the top of our voices when suddenly with out warning a shuffling noise came from the bushes. "Aaauggghh!"we screamed. "I want to investigate it it might be interesting."said Kylie . "me too!"said caitlin."I'm staying here"i said. Nobody knew what happened to them after that(i never saw them in school either).
bad lead-
i went on a path. i screamed. i jumped. i got scared.
Natalie
ReplyDeleteGood Lead
Me and my friend . We were in the forest. We tought the leafs are so pretty.We saw somthing jump in the bushes. It was a bunny .
Bad Lead
A cute bunny came
Mr. O
ReplyDeleteI have been having these same dreams for weeks now. I'm walking down a dirt path in the woods. It's fall, the leaves are golden. I feel like someone's behind of me. I look up the path for help and I see my parents. "Wait!" I yell. But my mouth won't work. There is no sound. Finally they point my direction- no behind me. They're frightened and pointing at something behind me.
marshall
ReplyDeletegood lead:
I was walking down a haunted trail it was so scaru thatehe fainted aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
bad lead:
I was scared.
Jacob
ReplyDeletethe yankkes baseball team was walking throught the forest when the boston redsox appeared and then they started fighting over the world seris trophey
and eventully boston won (like they
did in 2007)
bad lead:
there was a fight
Ella
ReplyDeleteGood lead
I love fall. it is soooo fun to rake leaves then jump in the pile. its fun!
bad lead
fall is sooooooooooooo fun.
bad laed
ReplyDeleteKate disappaerd
good laed
Me and Kate where walking in the woods one day . Then out of nowhere there was movement in the bushes Kate disappered so suddenly I didn't have any time to say a word .
Kylie
katelynn;
ReplyDeletegood laed; today i went to go take a
fall walk and i saw a fox, wolf
and a whole iot of ather things the wolf scratched me and I fell to the ground.
zakary
ReplyDeletegoodlead
I was walking in the woods I herd somthing and then I herd it agan somthing touch my shouder in pain a goblin I fell to the ground dead.
By:Bailey Jensen
ReplyDeleteGood lead:
One day in the summer I was runing through the woods and I saw a timber wolf. Then I ran so he not would kill me.