Monday, October 29, 2007

Lead #1- Barn


Write one strong lead and one weak lead for a story inspired by this picture.

31 comments:

  1. Riley
    My best friend and I ran, faster than ever before. We ran threw all the dried up weeds and long tree branches. Then we came to something we didn't expect. Something we've never seen in all the years we've lived here. There was only one word that popped into my head that moment in time and it was, alone.

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  2. We were walking, Dad and I, he fell and disappeared,now I was alone.I saw a big barn, and it looked haunted.

    I saw a haunted barn.

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  3. J.R
    It was nice fall day and all of a sudden a scream and I new it was the
    haunted barn.

    There was a cool barn in the woods.

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  4. Kwin wrote...we were walking...but forgot his name

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  5. Good Lead:
    I was walking towards a barn and it started to creak. It got louder. Something was coming for me.

    Bad Lead:
    There was a barn. It creaked.

    by:MG

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  6. I ran into an old barn all the sudden I felt a cold hand on my shoulder.

    I ran to a barn.
    by Ashley

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  7. Jane
    There was a haunted barn.I went inside.

    The cows and horses use to go in there,but why don't they now?I think I need to investigate.

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  8. I was biking with my friend once then we came across this scary barn,we heard a terrifying scream !


    I went over to my friends house and we went biking around the block,then we came to this barn,we decided to investigate......

    by SP

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  9. Mr. O
    Good Lead:
    As I walked through the woods I came upon something startling, an old barn that I had never seen before. I went round the back to the door and screamed.

    Bad Lead:
    There was a barn. It looked scary. I yelled.

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  10. Ella

    Good Lead

    I heard romers about a hunted old barn. I dident belive it. so I went to the barn to the barn to prove everyone. but when I opend the barn door,I screamed.

    bad lead

    The barn is cool.

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  11. By,Ryan

    Good lead:
    One day I went to a vacant barn with my dog I looked back and my dog was gone someone said run I ran and hurdled over a barb wire and logs I could only think of one thing lost!

    Bad lead:I went to a barn I got scared Iran slowly!

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  12. Natalie

    Good Lead

    One day I was out in the woods. I found a weird looking barn. I heard a noise . I think it was from that barn over there.It must be a cat or soming I wondered. There it was that stinkin mean little cat. Who allways scarchs me .



    Bad Lead



    This is a barn scary one tough.

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  13. Kylie

    badlaed
    I saw a scary barn .

    goo laed
    Me and my friend Kate where walking in the woods one day .Suddenly a creepy barn appaered in front of us then Kate disappaered .KATE !I screamed . Where are you !I'm over here .said Kate .how in the world did youget over there ?I asked .Know clue .I think the barn is haunted .

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  14. Kateylnn:
    Good Lead- one morning i woke up and
    I wanted to take a walk i got lost
    i saw scary barn and i went in it i
    felt a cold hand then it was blake.


    bad lead; i saw barn.

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  15. zakary
    goodlead
    I was walking in the woods then I came to a barn I went in side and I herd who dares enters the barn of the dead who are you no answer then a ghost apeared and said now you shoud dei he pull out sonthing he swung it and it was blury then black.

    badlead
    a barn I walked in and ouch that hurt.

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  16. I was runing through the woods playing paintball and then i came to a vacant house/barn and saw some thing moveing and then LIGHTS brite
    light came into sight.


    Lights fading I got shot.


    By E.R.





    By E.R

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  17. By:Bailey Jensen

    Good lead:
    One day I saw a barn in the woods. It had a dark sky above it and a bright moon. Then I saw my dog Jack and he saved me from the monster ,but it was just my Dad.

    Bad lead:
    I saw a barn. It was dark out. Then I saw my dog. Then I saw my dad.

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  18. kate R.
    Good lead:

    I was walking through the woods. Then I saw a spooky barn. I started to walk tord the barn....?

    Bad lead:
    I walked through the forest...?

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  19. Jacob

    good lead:

    my friends and i were walking through the forest when we saw an old barn.My friends dared me to go inside so i did it then my fourth grade teacher mr.O'brien came crashing through the celing

    bad lead:
    my teacher came through the celing

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  20. Max A.
    good lead:
    As I walked in the barn smething took my friend and I new, I was next.

    bad lead:
    something took my friend.

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  21. Ryan P.
    good lead:
    One day I when't in to the woods and saw a barn it looked vacant I deside to go in it. So I'm in it and I felt two hands on my sholders I got nervous & I ran out the door skereming haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.


    bad lead:
    I ran out the door skereming haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.

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  22. Ryan P.
    good lead:
    One day I when't in to the woods and saw a barn it looked vacant I deside to go in it. So I'm in it and I felt two hands on my sholders I got nervous & I ran out the door skereming haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.


    bad lead:
    I ran out the door skereming haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.

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  23. matt m.
    good lead.

    Me and my friend were walking through
    the woods. Then suddenly I felt a light breeze go by me I turned around
    and all I could say is,get out of here it's not safe for you.

    bad lead.
    I saw something scary.

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  24. Natalie

    Good Lead:

    Me and my friends were in the forest of darkness it was called. We all daring each other there.We were walking along . And we found a barn a creppy one too.So one of my friends asked me " this is a dare ' she told me " I dare you to go in that barn" i went in and Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh..............................


    Bad Lead

    I went in the creepy barn

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  25. Alex Wells
    Good Lead:

    Once upon a time there was a haunted barn and there were two hunters that heard rumors about it.They didn't beleve it.So they got prepared and they were in the woods in a flash...

    Bad Lead
    There was a scary barn.Two hunters didn't beleve it was haunted.They got ready fast.They were there quickly.

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  26. kate h-



    good lead-

    Your Wolf Ridge partners are...(sorry but this is in Wolf Ridge not school) Jake and Marshall, Matt and Ellie, Kylie and Kate .R., and Kate .H. and Tori."Ugghhh."I sighed. i didn't know Tori and I didn't know if I wanted to. "Now today class, You and your parters(at the word partners Tori turned waved and smiled at me)will be on a trek in the woods."Oh and did I mention that each pair will have their own trail and there won't be any adults."What!!!" I screamed in my head. The day came when we went on our trek. Tori and i were walking on our trail when we came upon an old barn. We tip-toed inside and we screamed and hugged ourselfs. It was the beginning of a new friendship.

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  27. kate h-



    good lead-

    Your Wolf Ridge partners are...(sorry but this is in Wolf Ridge not school) Jake and Marshall, Matt and Ellie, Kylie and Kate .R., and Kate .H. and Tori."Ugghhh."I sighed. i didn't know Tori and I didn't know if I wanted to. "Now today class, You and your parters(at the word partners Tori turned waved and smiled at me)will be on a trek in the woods."Oh and did I mention that each pair will have their own trail and there won't be any adults."What!!!" I screamed in my head. The day came when we went on our trek. Tori and i were walking on our trail when we came upon an old barn. We tip-toed inside and we screamed and hugged ourselfs. It was the beginning of a new friendship.

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  28. matt m.

    good lead.

    I like pumkins they are shiny & bumpy.Some are smooth & good to eat.They make good jacko laterns to.

    bad lead.

    I like pumkins.

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  29. Good Lead:
    I was walking my dog Lucky when I saw an abandoned barn so I went to investigate it but Lucky ran away so I had a choice. Find Lucky or investigate the barn. Then I started to walk

    Bad Lead:
    My dog an away before I went into a barn.

    -Taylor Urie

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  30. Jacob

    good lead:

    I was walking through the forest when I came across a old barn I thought that i was gonna fall over it looked so old.I decieded to go inside and then to my horror a cold creepy hand graped me

    bad lead:

    i went into an old barn

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  31. I was in the woods and came to a scary


    by gorege w bush#1

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